Hahaha nice man! My one suggestion would be the voice over wasn't synched up entirely at one point.
Hahaha nice man! My one suggestion would be the voice over wasn't synched up entirely at one point.
Title sequence is waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaay too long. I almost just clicked out of it.
The animation was extremely lazy and the frame rate was super low at some parts. All of the actions only had one or two frames and you'd loop them doing things that didn't really make sense.
The art style could be cool but it's really inconsistent and the colors are uncomfortable. The only redeeming quality is the drawings are decent.
I'd go learn the fundamentals of animation and motion.
I get it. Thank you for response.
The animation and art is really cool for the most part but the line quality and a few of the drawings are kind of sloppy at times. Also, while the color schemes are really cool and work well in some parts in some parts they don't work at all.
Good job!
I draw in a somewhat painting sort of way which Flash doesn't like. I mean this to be my last project with Flash since I cannot seem to exceed this quality level with it. Line consistency has never been my strength but it is worst in Flash, due in part to things coming out totally different based on the zoom level. Thank you for watching! I am curious which color schemes you thought were least tolerable.
Beautiful animation and art!
Thank you! :3
Hahahaha nice job man! I would just add some in-betweens for the animation to smooth it out.
Wow I'd love to work with you! Many Thanks for the constructive criticism. What's your email?
Gorgeous.
Thank you very much! :)
Good shit man. Your animation and art style is very well developed! You pumped this out really quick after creepy clown time. I wouldn't use the gradient shading though it looks kind of cheap and doesn't really go with the rest of the art.
Thanks.
Not bad man theres a lot you could improve on though. Your biggest strength is that you're thinking a lot about shot composition and framing which is pretty good.
Your art style could be a lot cleaner though and I'd spend more time making a set of mouths for each sound that looks really clean so that lip synch is taken care of from the beginning since you're using a lot of it.
As far as shading I'd think about light source, which is going to usually by diagonally from above like the sun or a light in the room. Right now your shading looks like it's coming from the left or right.
Also you have a lot of lines intersecting things where they shouldn't you might wanna think about cleaning up. Also just using less heavy lines in general.
The voice acting could also use work.
Lastly I'd try to cut your next cartoon down about half the length. Even the title screen was there for about twice along as it needed to be.
Keep practicing!
thanks for your tips i will try to fix up my animation :)
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