StephenHutchins's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Kerbal Space Adventure: Cold]

"There comes a time in your life when you gotta buckle down and say 'I am insane' and you just gotta roll with it."

You have no idea how much I relate to that lol.

I liked the concept of this but the execution was a bit off. The script needed to be shortened and made tighter, and the animation/art should have more variation in it. It gets visually boring after a point and the humor gets old. If this was cut down to a minute of the funniest moments it would be a stronger piece.

It's okay that you have virtually no actual animation in this since I assume that's the style you're going for but that means the script and voice acting are going to be doing all the heavy-lifting and I don't think they're quite at that level yet.

Keep at it!

Talverty responds:

Very valid criticisms, I ended up doing quite a few rewrites for the script this episode as I had a general idea of what needed to happen to advance the story, I just didn't know how to accomplish it.

I do generally want the videos to be around this length so I have enough time to turn things around at the end/develop events. I think the current issues caused by the length are more just side effects of my own inexperience/incompetence.

Thanks for the feedback! I'll try as much as I can to improve on these issues and I'll see what the next one looks like.

[Stop Pollution Short Animation]

The art style is dope and the animation is pretty good but it's pretty predictable and the smoke effects look kind of slip-shod.

Do you use flash to animate? were you using the "soften fill edges" tool to create the smoke? because if so you needed to add more steps and pixels to make it look fluffy. Right now it just looks poorly rendered. Also the smoke clouds coming out of the pipes are stretched in weird proportions.

The art style ultimately carries this as being the strongest point of focus. Keep it up!

diamondamey responds:

Hi Stephen,

Thank you very much for your suggestions.
I definitely implement the changes.

Thanks

[Creepy Clown Time]

incredible

michaelgutierrez1017 responds:

Thanks bud.

[Toadette is a cheater (Super Mario Run)]

Haha the art is great but the joke didn't land that well for me. Best of luck! You definitely have talent.

Evy-Devy responds:

Thank you very much! I'm trying to work on comedy the best I can as well as art/animation. Trying to get one joke out may not work like I originally visioned or it may not just click for some people. (Well, you still typed Haha, so I guess you at least found it humorous. XD) This joke was meant to be simple but the time it took to make the whole animation takes forever. I'm trying harder to make sure the jokes land as making sure the joke is worth from now on.

[Israro Animation Showreel 2016-2017]

At it's best these are really impressive at their worst they are very average. Why did you start with a mouse crawl and a generic walk cycle? You should have your most impressive shots first. The goblin, the wizard, and pencil were probably the smoothest animation.

Ismartal responds:

Is my first showreel. When preparing the composition did not think that the order of the clips was important, I did more based on the content and the duration of these, but I will keep in mind.

Thank you very much for your comment!

[PAPERTHIN: Rebels (Chapter 4)]

Awesome work! The style of key frame pose animation works really well with the fighting. You really know how to create believable motion in a few frames.

My only suggestion would be a frame or two of gentle ease for less extreme actions like moving their arm to another position. It looks choppy at that point because the motion is a lot slower.

Great work

AguRex responds:

Thanks for the feedback. I'll make the adjustments . Hope I have enough time though. Thanks a lot.

[50 Bouncing Balls]

Really cool! I would have had the pacing pick up at around the second row, it started to feel too slow after you caught on the concept.

Good job!

manzanimator responds:

yeah! you are certainly right! packing every cycle correcly was hard haha.

[YOU & ME - Episode #01]

Just watched your other cartoon, this one is a bit funnier but hearing this one as well I think you could use a better female voice actor. Just tryna help I hope the advice isn't annoying lol.

CreativeFosse responds:

Thanks for your feedback, StephenHutchins.

The female voice actor did deliver different variations of voices that she does, but in my head the voice that is used for the female character really fit the personality of the character.
So the female voice actor (or actress) is not to blame for this "bad" voice as the choice of using her voice in this way is totally mine.

I appreciate your opinion and your feedback on your point of view (I really do) but in my head the voice works well with the female character (there will be more intence voice acting in future episodes that hopefully will release the unknown levels of what this voice is capable of).

Anyway, thanks again for your feeback. It really matters to me.

Enjoy your day.

[YOU & ME - Episode #02]

The art style is dope but the joke is not nearly funny enough to carry the cartoon. It's only a couple seconds long and the whole thing is riding on that joke being funny and it's not that good.

Not trying to be mean, your character and background design is good you just need better writing.

CreativeFosse responds:

Hi, StephenHutchins.

Thank you for your feedback. It helps me to see things in a different way than before.
I agree that the animation might be too short and because of that it don't slam the punchline well enough.
But this animation is based on a comic strip with 3-4 panels and what I've tried to do is to make those panels come alive through animation without too much changes and work. I was trying to maintain the the same progression in the animation as in the comic strip. Maybe it doesn't work as well as I hoped for and I'll really appreciate it if others too would like to comment on this. I will however keep this in mind for future episodes and experiment with it a little more.

Thanks again for your feeback.

Enjoy your day.

[Worst Gym Ever]

Your art style is on point but the story is way too long and not that engaging or funny.

I understand what you're trying to do with the minimalistic animation/animatic to go along with a story but you need to have more diversity in your choice of frames and composition.

50% of the shots are the exact same shot of a blonde guy not even moving on the right side of the screen.

Anyway, it has potential and your art style is aesthetically pleasing for the most part so just keep working at it.

satkatanimations responds:

Thank you for the feedback :). I will definitely work on it.