StephenHutchins's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Edgy Stuff]

Title sequence is waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaay too long. I almost just clicked out of it.

The animation was extremely lazy and the frame rate was super low at some parts. All of the actions only had one or two frames and you'd loop them doing things that didn't really make sense.

The art style could be cool but it's really inconsistent and the colors are uncomfortable. The only redeeming quality is the drawings are decent.

I'd go learn the fundamentals of animation and motion.

sadsorcer responds:

I get it. Thank you for response.

[first beet of the year part 2]

The animation and art is really cool for the most part but the line quality and a few of the drawings are kind of sloppy at times. Also, while the color schemes are really cool and work well in some parts in some parts they don't work at all.

Good job!

bimshwel responds:

I draw in a somewhat painting sort of way which Flash doesn't like. I mean this to be my last project with Flash since I cannot seem to exceed this quality level with it. Line consistency has never been my strength but it is worst in Flash, due in part to things coming out totally different based on the zoom level. Thank you for watching! I am curious which color schemes you thought were least tolerable.

[Talk to Me]

Beautiful animation and art!

LaleyWasHere responds:

Thank you! :3

[LOVE THE MOOCHERS Paid Programming C.T.M. (CLOSE THAT MOUTH)]

Hahahaha nice job man! I would just add some in-betweens for the animation to smooth it out.

softcactusfilms responds:

Wow I'd love to work with you! Many Thanks for the constructive criticism. What's your email?

[Nezni Dalibor - Zauvek]

Gorgeous.

DavorSopic responds:

Thank you very much! :)

[RULE-BREAKER]

Good shit man. Your animation and art style is very well developed! You pumped this out really quick after creepy clown time. I wouldn't use the gradient shading though it looks kind of cheap and doesn't really go with the rest of the art.

michaelgutierrez1017 responds:

Thanks.

[Norman and sho s1e1]

Not bad man theres a lot you could improve on though. Your biggest strength is that you're thinking a lot about shot composition and framing which is pretty good.

Your art style could be a lot cleaner though and I'd spend more time making a set of mouths for each sound that looks really clean so that lip synch is taken care of from the beginning since you're using a lot of it.

As far as shading I'd think about light source, which is going to usually by diagonally from above like the sun or a light in the room. Right now your shading looks like it's coming from the left or right.

Also you have a lot of lines intersecting things where they shouldn't you might wanna think about cleaning up. Also just using less heavy lines in general.

The voice acting could also use work.

Lastly I'd try to cut your next cartoon down about half the length. Even the title screen was there for about twice along as it needed to be.

Keep practicing!

KaboomAnimationz responds:

thanks for your tips i will try to fix up my animation :)

[An Alien Affair]

This is really dope! Concept and humor are great! Art and animation are great!

The only thing is BRO THIS IS SO OBVIOUSLY COPIED FROM RICK AND MORTY like come on it's super obvious.

The way the guy says "Kerry" after every sentence like how Rick says "Morty", the way the voice actor played him was in the same emotionality and cadence of Rick and you even made his pupils have the same shape at 2:25!

Why'd you do that?? it doesn't add any substance to the film and only detracts.

Would have given a 4.5/5 or 5/5 if it wasn't for that.

Good shit tho

TylerLandis responds:

Thanks man! His voice was definitely inspired by Rick, I didn't realize that would bother people so much! Rick and Morty was the first time I saw something on television and thought "Woah, this is like, my sense of humor! On TV!" which was a big moment for me, because I never thought my sense of humor would work on TV. I thought it was too weird. I just thought for this cartoon it would be fun to use a voice similar to Rick's for Dan's character, and that it'd be a fun little reference to a show I love. I can see the newgrounds community is not of a similar mind haha

[Kerbal Space Adventure: Cold]

"There comes a time in your life when you gotta buckle down and say 'I am insane' and you just gotta roll with it."

You have no idea how much I relate to that lol.

I liked the concept of this but the execution was a bit off. The script needed to be shortened and made tighter, and the animation/art should have more variation in it. It gets visually boring after a point and the humor gets old. If this was cut down to a minute of the funniest moments it would be a stronger piece.

It's okay that you have virtually no actual animation in this since I assume that's the style you're going for but that means the script and voice acting are going to be doing all the heavy-lifting and I don't think they're quite at that level yet.

Keep at it!

Talverty responds:

Very valid criticisms, I ended up doing quite a few rewrites for the script this episode as I had a general idea of what needed to happen to advance the story, I just didn't know how to accomplish it.

I do generally want the videos to be around this length so I have enough time to turn things around at the end/develop events. I think the current issues caused by the length are more just side effects of my own inexperience/incompetence.

Thanks for the feedback! I'll try as much as I can to improve on these issues and I'll see what the next one looks like.